Block 689B Choa Chu Kang Drive
#04-308, Singapore 682689
September 05th, 2009
To whom it may concern
Ministry of Education, Singapore
1 North Buona Vista DriveSingapore 138675
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am well aware with the high standards the Ministry of Education has set and it would be a privilege for me to be a part of your staff.
Being a full-time student and a part-time tutor has taught me lifelong lessons. They involve time management, responsibility, and organizational skills which I plan on using in the class room. In addition I am an enthusiastic, determined and highly motivated teacher. I want my students to grow socially as well as academically. I possess many skills related to your teaching position. These skills make me a good candidate for the teaching position.
I have a B.S. degree in chemistry obtained from the National University of Singapore (NUS). My degree will assist me in teaching the students to the best of my abilities.
I have been a chemistry and math tutor for the last 4 years. While being a tutor, I developed skills directly pertaining to your teaching position. Tutoring students has also built up in me skills in understanding the student mentality, which will assist me a lot with handling a variety of students.
I have also been an English tutor for the last 4 years. Tutoring students in their English studies has taught me respect and patience. This attribute will be very beneficial with regards to being a teacher at of one your schools.
I have taught many students in their weakest fields of study and have felt very rewarding to see great improvements along their studies.
With these skills I believe that I am ready to take up the challenge and be part of the dynamic teaching staff in Singapore. I would like the opportunity to live my dream to become a teacher. Given the chance, I would try my very hardest to be an asset to the Ministry of Education.
I appreciate your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely yours,
Ms. Tang
Hi Anh,
ReplyDeleteThere is great improvement from your 1st draft, good job.
You should leave a line after each paragraph and before signing off. In your 2nd paragraph, there should be a comma after “In addition…” In your 3rd and 4th paragraphs, the letter “c” in “chemistry” should be capital letter. Also, in your 4th paragraph, it would be better to write “Mathematics” instead of “math”.
Hello Ahn!
ReplyDeleteTold you that if you drafted it properly, it will turn out a good application letter! Good job!
I don't know if it helps but you can probably talk about the education system in Singapore? And why you are so keen on teaching under MOE rather than some private institute. I guess this falls under complimenting MOE!
Joyce
Anh, there are too many "1's in this. vary sentence structures so it is not so repetitive.
ReplyDeleteWhy don't you paragraph this? The reader would face a wall of writing-make it easy for them please and organise what you want to say into short,concise paragraphs which include evidence for the claims you make.
Proofread! If you want to be a teacher, they won't want to see any mistakes.Egs 'with regards to' and 'well aware of,' BSc.
Good points: You come over as sincere and earnest and your teaching experience is impressive.
Mrs Richardson